Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Long-term goal achievement

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Hey everyone i'm really keen on getting some multi-media links for my chapter just seeing if anyone else had come across any cool videos?

also what are peoples thoughts of me applying theories with story examples? perhaps i could follow three journeys throughout? 26/9/16

Hi, I embedded the links into the titles for the Youtube videos you had, so you can see a description instead of the URL. I've also added the coding for the hanging indent for your reference list :) --U3083764 (discuss • contribs) 10:26, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi - there are a couple of pictures/categories in Wiki Commons that may be appropriate, such as: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Category:Carrot_and_stick https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Intrinsic_Vs_Extrinsic_Motivation.jpg?uselang=en-gb https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Extrinsic-motivation.jpg?uselang=en-gb Hope it helps 124.179.56.195 (discuss) 23:57, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey, Here are some images I thought might be relevant to your chapter. Someone climbing a mountain (represents goal setting) - https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Climbing_to_%22Magaro%22,_Mountain_Galichica,_Ohrid,_Macedonia.jpg A calendar: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Calendar-Logo-256x256.png Starting line of a race: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Athletes_launch_off_at_the_starting_line_at_the_2014_Warrior_Trials_140617-A-AE845-006.jpg Hope these help U3081523 (discuss • contribs) 00:09, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

feedback

Hi, great topic! I think you have done a great job at researching the underlying theories of goal setting. I have corrected a few spelling mistakes and I would probably check some of the in-text citations as not all of them were APA formatted. I liked the image comparing extrinsic to intrinsic motivation. --JazNF (discuss • contribs) 06:16, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi Olivia! Chapter is looking great. One thing I can suggest is that with your headings, not every word needs to be capitalised, James actually posted feedback on my discussion tab and said it should read as this "Brief history" not "Brief History" so only the first word needs to be capitalised :) you can go have a look at my discussion tab if you like to see what he said! Melinda --U3100166 (discuss • contribs) 00:07, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

APA style figure and table captions

I recommend using APA style figure and table captions. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:06, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Grit vs gritt?

I'm wondering why there are two different spellings used? Also, consider linking to Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Grit -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:21, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid, basic chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Theory is well covered, particularly in relation to Locke and Latham's approach. Including grit was promising, but it lacked sufficient explanation - to improve, consider summarising key points from the grit chapter and linking the reader to it for more information. Opening sentence is circuitous. Conclusion is very helpful, with its emphasis on take-home messages. Research Relevant research is reasonably well described and cited. Was the Mace (1935) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression quality is reasonable. For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme. Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Structure and headings Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links. There is basic use of images or tables - more explanatory captions are needed. Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text. Learning features Quiz questions are used to encourage reader engagement, however 'correct' answers need to be indicated and discussed. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. Spelling is OK, but there are many instances where it could be improved - see the tags. Why is grit spelt sometimes in this chapter as gritt? Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style Use APA style for table and figure captions. Check and correct the use of APA style for direct quotes. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:17, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content Overview Reasonable Perhaps consider including some examples of short vs. long goals? Selection and organisation Good coverage of relevant theory Minimal coverage of relevant research Well structured. No citations? References are included. Check grammar Conclusion Excellent - summarises take-home messages Take-home messages / key points are well summarised. Communication Audio Audio is clear and well-paced. Video Visuals are clear and easy to read. Some of the font colours for the image attributions are hard to read The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Overall, well produced. Meta-data Check spelling Rename to include the subtitle (so that it matches the book chapter). A link to the presentation is provided. Very good use of the Description field. Audio recording quality Clear, loud Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is shown.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:18, 20 November 2016 (UTC)