Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Leisure motivation

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Hi I have found an article that you may find helpful it is titled: Relationships Among Adolescents' Leisure Motivation, Leisure Involvement, and Leisure Satisfaction: A Structural Equation Model. It can be accessed through the university library website using EBSCOhost. Take a look at the model on page 1191 it may be helpful for you. Best of luck! http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=4&sid=8c1a00bf-db61-454c-8c67-100c37e09569%40sessionmgr1&bdata=#AN=84765115&db=heh --LeoDean1993 (discuss • contribs) 10:11, 2 October 2016 (UTC)

Formatting

Hi there,

I hope you don't mind, but I've added an APA hanging indent template to your reference list.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 01:51, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I made some grammatically changes to your overview so it reads a bit more easily. Hope you don't mind me changing it automatically. Your page sounds interesting keep it up!! U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 04:45, 9 October 2016 (UTC)

Possible direction for motivational theories about leisure

Hey there,

I found some articles on positive psychology and nature therapy which could be an interesting direction to take leisure motivation chapter in. So for example, a case study on the benefits of nature therapy for hikers or people who love the outdoors.

Or using positive psychology as a part of a nature therapy intervention to increase leisure motivation.

Positive psychology http://s3.amazonaws.com/academia.edu.documents/38825564/Seligman_and_Csikszentmihalyi_salud_positiva.pdf?AWSAccessKeyId=AKIAJ56TQJRTWSMTNPEA&Expires=1476245518&Signature=CBRh%2BrEOB8JrWpkfiV%2Bp3mbYbRw%3D&response-content-disposition=inline%3B%20filename%3DPositive_Psychology_An_Introduction.pdf

Positive psychology and outdoor education https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Dene_Berman/publication/258150396_Positive_Psychology_and_Outdoor_Education/links/55fffa8508ae07629e51ec01.pdf

Nature-assisted therapy http://plus.rjl.se/info_files/infosida40834/nature_assisted_terapi_Wahrborg_2011.pdf

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 03:12, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey, I came across and article that may be of use to you, good luck! Padhy, M., Valli, S. K., Pienyu, R., Padiri, R. A., & Chelli, K. (2015). Leisure motivation and well-being among adolescents and young adults. Psychological Studies, 60(3), 314-320. doi:10.1007/s12646-015-0327-5--JEMwarren (discuss • contribs) 09:58, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Overjustification effect

Hi, I was having a quick read of your chapter and thought it would be worth mentioning something on the overjustification effect and how it influences behaviours or activities that are intrinsically motivated. Here's an article that could be useful http://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10864-013-9193-1 --Jbboys (discuss • contribs) 05:49, 15 October 2016 (UTC)

APA style for figure and table captions

Check/correct that APA style is used for figure and table captions. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:22, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Headings

Remove full-stops from headings. Also, avoid having only one sub-section within a section; either add a second sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi!

I like how relatable the overview section is, because it's such a common experience! I think you could maybe link 'leisure' to a wikipedia article, just in case.

I've also edited some of your in-text references as the punctuation was off, and I've also fixed some minor punctuation errors within the text. I made sure to clearly log everything under the 'View History' tab so you can undo it if you need to!

I have one other thing: under the intrinsic motivation section you mention autonomy, competence and relatedness and follow all of them with 'in self-detemination theory'. I think you can leave that out after the first one because the reader knows that you are still on the same topic.

I hope you find this helpful!

Cora --Cora.boyle (discuss • contribs) 08:18, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Otherwise, this is a really interesting read (especially at this time of the semester!)

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Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a strong chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical overview of relevant theory and research and makes effective use of the wiki environment. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Relevant theory is well described, related to leisure, and integrated with discussion of research. Several helpful examples or case studies were provided. The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions. Research Research relevant to the theories is cited. However, it would be good to incorporated more studies about leisure participation motivation. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally very good - see my copyedits for suggestions of where the writing can be made more succint by leaving out fluff words/phrases. For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences. Avoid starting so many sentences with a source's author or date, unless this is particularly pertinent. Provide the citation at the end of the sentence instead. The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme. Structure and headings Each section should include at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. The chapter is well-structured. Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Integration with other chapters Some useful integration with other chapters is evident. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Use APA style for table captions. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:32, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a creative, engaging, well produced presentation which provides good coverage of theory/research in a practical manner. There's two slightly different angles possible to address the topic and its somewhat unclear/mixed which question is being addressed by the book chapter and the multimedia presentation: Why do people participate in leisure activities? How can we motivate ourselves or others to participate in leisure activities? Structure and content Overview See comments above about what the focus question for the presentation really is. Overview what the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation A fair bit of theory is covered, so probably be more selective and abbreviate to allow at least some research review and a richer conclusion. Limited research. Engaging use of examples via video. No citations? Well focused towards theory-based improvements in everyday life. Conclusion Weak/no conclusion? A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Audio is clear, well-intonated, and well-paced. Image/Video Very well produced. Visuals are clear and easy to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Overall, creative and very well produced. Meta-data Well titled. Link to chapter provided. Excellent use of the Description field to provide relevant information. Audio recording quality Excellent Image/video recording quality Excellent Creative Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is shown.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:55, 20 November 2016 (UTC)