Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Chronic pain and negative emotion

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Some people believe that music can also controls and helps relieve chronic pain. This is because music can attracts and engage with our attention and emotion, especially songs or pieces that we are familiar and prefer. These music have greater positive effects on pain tolerance, reduces anxiety and help us to increases the feelings of control over our pain. Yet, there is not much evident shows that how music influence the listeners but music is still using in some clinical settings such as palliative care, paediatrics or surgery. - u3165555


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Overall edit

  1. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  2. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
  3. Overall, this is a solid chapter which covers theory very thoroughly to provided a well-grounded treatment; the chapter could probably be improved by abbreviating some theory to allow key research to be covered in more detail.

Theory edit

  1. Overview is effective.
  2. Body
    1. Abbreviate the general theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This will allow more space to explain key research findings.
    2. Quotes were helpful, if perhaps somewhat one-sided.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Show good integration of concepts and addresses self-help theme.

Research edit

  1. Good review and description of relevant research, but perhaps could be expanded in places - e.g., pharmacotherapy seems to be almost written off as useless - but the science is probably more nuanced/complex.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  5. Consider possibly reporting on meta-analytic findings.

Written expression edit

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme.
  2. Structure and headings
    1. Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
    2. The chapter is well-structured.
  3. Layout
    1. Tables 1 and 2 could be improved by putting location, sensation, and damage into columns
    2. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
    3. Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Limited integration with other chapters is evident.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add more Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles e.g., chronic pain) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
    3. Answer to first quiz question was wrong (fixed)
  6. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags) - check and correct use of commas (e.g., "For example" -> "For example, ")..
  7. APA style
    1. Use APA style for table and figure captions.
    2. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets).
    3. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:50, 5 February 2017 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a basic, sufficient presentation.
  2. Overall, this is a simple, effective presentation.
  3. Overall, this is a solid presentation.
  4. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.
  5. Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation.
  6. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation.
  1. The Multimedia topic differs from the Book Chapter topic.  
  1. Well over the 3 minute maximum time limit.
  2. Well under the 3 minute maximum time limit.

Structure and content edit

  1. Overview
    1. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
    2. An example could help to set the scene and engage the viewer.
    3. Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
    2. Theory rich; research poor.
    3. Addresses a self-help theme.
    4. Consider using more illustrative examples.
    5. Include citations and references.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Take-home messages / key points are well summarised.

Communication edit

  1. Audio
    1. Well narrated.
    2. Audio is reasonably clear and well-paced.
    3. Varied intonation added interest and engagement.
  2. Visuals
    1. The animated combination of images and text is effective in attracting and sustaining viewer attention.

Production quality edit

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename so that it reflects the title and sub-title of the book chapter as listed in the book's table of contents.

so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).

    1. Add a link to the book chapter.
    2. Fill out the Description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  1. Audio recording quality
    1. Good, clear
  2. Image/video recording quality
    1. Good, clear
  3. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Standard YouTube License.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 5 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

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