Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Willpower

Comments

The dot points you have listed look as though you will cover the topic well, however, it is hard to give feedback because of the minimal amount of content. I've tidied up the quotes section a bit by adding dot points. It might be a good idea to utilise this throughout your chapter to make things a bit clearer. Goodluck. )--JacquelineSpence (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi Your outline looks pretty good and I think this will be a fascinating topic to research. I would definitely look into a neurocognitive perspective as well, as one of the articles I've attached below was mentioning the relationship between the two. Research also suggests that blood glucose level also affects an individual's self-control.

Mischel, W., Cantor, N., & Feldman, S. (1996). Principles of self-regulation: The nature of willpower and self-control. Gailliot, M. T., & Baumeister, R. F. (2007). The physiology of willpower: Linking blood glucose to self-control. Personality and Social Psychology Review, 11(4), 303-327. Bénabou, R., & Tirole, J. (2004). Willpower and personal rules. Journal of Political Economy, 112(4), 848-886. All the best and I look forward to reading you chapter :) --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 07:19, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:01, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a really chapter which provides a very cogent theoretical and empirical discussion about willpower. The chapter could be improved by adding a conclusion, with some take messages. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well explained, from historical to contemporary. Some case studies, examples, or exercises could help to make the chapter more interactive. Research Research is well covered and explained. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources. Similarly, avoid dictionaries; use a primary, peer-reviewed source. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally very good. In a few places, the quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). The chapter would benefit from a more developed Conclusion, with take-home self-help message for each focus question. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing No Tables or Figures are used. The suggested Figures were not able to be used because copyright permission didn't allow re-use. Learning features The chapter makes minimal use of interactive learning features such as interwiki links, tables, figures, quiz etc. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are generally very good. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., formatting of et al.) Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:01, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:57, 3 December 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation. Structure and content Well structured. Appropriate content for a naive/novice audience. How/why is glucose important to willpower - room perhaps to explain this in more depth? Any examples of research studies? Theory was well covered. Excellent use of illustrative examples. Perhaps consider a more explicit conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages. Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Images are clear, interesting, varied, and relevant, including some use of movement/animation. Varied intonation adds interest and engagement. Minimal/no use of small font (good). The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Overall, well produced and published via youtube. A working link to the presentation was not provided from book chapter (a link has now been added). Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter - no student ID needed). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). The copyright licenses and sources for the images used are not provided - the presentation may violent copyright. The copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated in the slides/video, but needs to be updated in the meta-data. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:23, 19 February 2016 (UTC)