Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Suppression of benevolent emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:31, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

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Structural suggestions

I proof-read your chapter and made a few grammatical changes. You can see what I changed here. A couple of sentences are really long and hard to comprehend, so I would suggest trying to break these up into smaller one-point sentences. It seems like you are on the right track; however, I presume you still need to do your referencing (one in-text citation was missing a date). Also, maybe take the introduction out of the 'Overview' box to make it more readable?
Good luck, U3083676 (discuss • contribs) 04:03, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

What can be done about the suppression of benevolent interpersonal feelings?

U3052056 suggested "use other emotion regulation strategies" as a possible answer to this question and asked for my comment. This sounds like a helpful, logical answer. The material in Reeve (2015) Chapter 15 about unconscious motivation could provide some useful ideas, particularly the material about the development of ego effectance and mature defense mechanisms. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:00, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by a heavy edit because it is over the maximum word-count, so should be rewritten more succintly. One way this could be done is to focus less on the suppression of emotion generally, and more on the suppression of benevolent emotion. A thorough proofread to fix grammatical, spelling, and APA style errors is also needed. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Reasonable coverage of relevant theory is provided. It could be helpful to discuss suppression as a defense mechanism (and link to the book chapter about defense mechanisms). It could be helpful to link to describe emotion regulation (and link to the book chapter about emotion regulation). The examples are helpful. Research Research was reasonably well covered, but needs a more disciplined focus to fit within the word count. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression was reasonable, but there were also many aspects for potential improvement: Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Avoid sections with only one paragraph. A section should have at least two paragraphs. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Use gender-neutral language (e.g., man-made -> human-made) Use default heading styles; remove bold The chapter is well-structured. Some Figures were used. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Add links to Appendices. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Spelling could be improved - see the tags. Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets. Grammar and proofreading The grammar of many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., Gross (2008;2002;1998), et al.). Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets). Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:31, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall The presentation wasn't publicly viewable. Structure and content Communication Production quality

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:34, 26 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Well structured, however this is a 'heavy' presentation - probably too 'heavy' for the target audience. By heavy, I mean theory/text-heavy, with little in the way of practical example or practical take-home strategy. Communication Voice communication is flat-toned - use greater variation in intonation to help engage viewers. Increase font size (or zoom in) to make text easier to read. Production quality Audio recording quality and volume varied significantly between slides (distracting) - review microphone/recording set up. A broken link was submitted (fixed up now on Wikiversity). The presentation audio didn't play beyond the first slide; manually clicking needed. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:24, 27 November 2015 (UTC)