Latest comment: 8 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hey Liz,
Your book chapter is really good. You write well and you have done an excellent job of explaining the motivation behind leading a paleolithic lifestyle. I like the use of the video and the pictures make it visually appealing. In regards to your theories, I would suggest you look at the social learning theory as a means to explain why people follow a palo lifestyle. According to the social learning theory, people behave a particular way because that is expected of them. Thus, people follow a pale lifestyle because they believe others expect them to behave and act in this manner. Additionally, the drive theory can help explain the motivation behind following this lifestyle. The drive theory suggests that people take action due to their negative state of tension which is caused when psychological needs are not met, in order to return to a harmonious state. You could also talk about the evolutionary theory too.
ref: Anderson, C. A., & Bushman, B. J. (2002). Human aggression. Psychology, 53 (1), 27.
Bandura, A. (1977). Social learning theory. Englewood Cliffs, N.J: Prentice Hall.
Latest comment: 8 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Theory related to a PD is covered and some motivational theory is covered, but there needs to be a more extensive consideration of what motivates people to regulate their eating such as through a PD.
A critical perspective is not apparent - at times the chapter verges on overenthusiastic and non-evidence based enthusiasm for PD.
Research about the health benefits of a PD is reported, but the topic is really about motivation for following a PD.
The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. However, they tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we")
The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
Add a Conclusion.
Layout
Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
Incorporate link to other related chapter (e.g., digestive system and emotion, weight loss, healthy lifestyle, exercise motivation).
Quiz questions and video links are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
Spelling
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise).
Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags.
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The grammar of several sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
APA style
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Italicise Figure X.
Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations, including use of et al.
Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
Latest comment: 8 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Some motivation theory is mentioned, but is not really applied, and little research is mentioned. The conclusion claims that health goals are a major motivation for eating a PD, but no research is presented to support this claim.
The presentation lacks critical objectivity (it seems to be overenthused about the PD - or least doesn't seem to entertain critical/alternative views).
Check spelling (e.g., affects, solutions)
Include citations about evidence for claims.
Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
Audio recording quality is poor due white noise - review microphone set-up.
Rename the title so that it incorporates the full title and subtitle.
Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
