Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Nootropics and motivation

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Hi! Your chapter is looking really good. My only suggestion is that you add some relevant images to add more visual interest. I also suggest you add more links (e.g. for narcolepsy, dopamine, norepinephrine and isomers). Hope that helps! --U3082322 (discusscontribs) 08:44, 22 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Heading casing edit

 
FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:56, 21 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a very promising chapter which could be improved by having a more integrated emphasis on theory and professional proofeading. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory edit

  1. Theory with respect to the different nootropic drugs is well covered.
  2. Psychological theory about motivation in relation to the effects of nootropics is less well covered and left to the end.
  3. Addition of case studies and examples was helpful.

Research edit

  1. Research is well covered.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression edit

  1. The Overview is excellent.
  2. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  3. The Overview and Conclusion sections were excellent.
  4. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Add images to help the text more interactive.
    3. Add bullet-points for See also and External links
  5. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
    2. No images were used.
  6. Spelling
    1. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise)
  7. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,")
    2. The grammar of some sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    3. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals')
  8. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables.
    2. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets).
    3. Check and correct the APA style for table captions.
    4. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:32, 23 November 2015 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content edit

  1. Include citations.
  2. How does SDT relate to nootropics? (explain)
  3. What is the effect size for performance enhancement of using nootropics?
  4. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful.

Communication edit

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.
  3. Visuals are basic, clear and easy to read.

Production quality edit

  1. Audio includes keyboard clicks - review microphone set-up.
  2. Book chapter link goes to a particular section of the target chapter - adjust.
  3. Description is minimal but sufficient.
  4. The copyright license and source for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (e.g., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:02, 26 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

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