Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Meditative colouring and stress

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:56, 29 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a brief, but succint and interesting overview of the effect of meditative colouring on stress. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory could be covered in more depth. It makes sense to include anxiety, but the question was about stress and there is relatively little mention of stress. Consideration of art therapy is appropriate, as there is little research on colouring in per se. However, more explanation of how/why art therapy might work would be useful. Research Research about art therapy is well described and appropriate. More research related to stress would be appropriate. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally very good. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Minimal use of images and tables. Learning features Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise, behavior -> behaviour). Spelling could be improved - see the tags. Grammar and proofreading Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets. Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). APA style Check and correct the APA style for figure captions. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). Direct quotes need page numbers. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., for et al.) The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:02, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content The presentation focuses on anxiety - but the question is about stress. Appropriate focus on art therapy more broadly. Perhaps more theoretical detail could be added about meditative colouring - what is unique about it (that makes it different from other forms of art therapy?) What is the research evidence? What are the practical, take-home messages? Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Varied intonation adds interest and engagement. Visual communication consists of basic, text-based slides with one example of a colouring picture. Production quality Audio narration is a little hesitant early on - consider more rehearsal.# Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Rename the title so that it is more descriptive and meaningful. Fill out the description field with e.g., brief description of presentation, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or audio transcript). A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:09, 3 December 2015 (UTC)