Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Kindness and happiness

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I was going to suggest linking your chapter to buddhism. Make sure you have good definition of both concepts to avoid confusion of everyones personal definitions being applied to the chapter. All best Iga.leszczynska (discuss • contribs) 02:17, 9 October 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi. What a cool topic you have chosen. Your writing is really good and you make some great points. i would suggest looking into putting some more pictures on your page to break up the information and make it visually appealing. i also think you might want to incorporate some theories (maslow's hierarchy of needs), james-lange theory, and the schachter-singer theory. The james-lange theory basically states that emotion is caused by the body responding to an event, not the individual's perception of it. So an individual will first experience a bodily response (e.g racing heart) which corresponds to the emotion. after experiencing the active response, the emotion will be experience. (e.g if i see a magpie my heart starts racing. my body interprets my racing heart and then my brain tells me i am nervous). the sschacter-singer theory discusses how someone can only experience emotion if they are capture in the moment. their body responds and the emotional response must occur. (e.g someone can be excited to go to the movies and be terrified of an intrude, both cause a racing heart yet illicit different emotions). each emotion is situation dependant. i would also look at the biology and what happens in the brain and the areas affected when doing kind actions.

ref: Schopler, J., & Compere, J. S. (1971). Effects of being kind or harsh to another on liking. Journal of Personality and Social Psychology, 20(2), 155. LeDoux, J. (1998). The emotional brain: The mysterious underpinnings of emotional life. Simon and Schuster. Good luck and i look forward to reading your chapter! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 04:45, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter needs considerable refocus and rewriting in order to represent a professional response based on psychological theory and research. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory There is a distinct lack of focus on theory about how kindness influences happiness. Examples could be helpful. Research There is a distinct lack of focus on research about how kindness influences happiness. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression This chapter is significantly undermined by poor quality written expression (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Some sentences are overly long and contain "fluff" words and phrases (i.e., the sentences could be improved by removing the fluff). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links There is limited use of Tables and Figures. Learning features There is limited use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles. Spelling Spelling could be improved - see the tags Grammar and proofreading The grammar of many sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the tags) Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,") Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets APA style Put in-text citations in alphabetical order The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:08, 19 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation. Structure and content The first third or so of the presentation addressed the topic, but the last two third was about happiness and not about kindness and happiness. Include citations and references. Communication Audio was slightly too fast. Visuals are clear and easy to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement. Production quality Overall, well produced. The audio is cut-off slightly at the end of some slides. Revise the title - remove "A presentation" and consider including the chapter subtitle. Revise description - e.g., provide more detail about the presentation and indicate what copyright license you wish to apply.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:20, 25 November 2015 (UTC)