Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Height and mental health

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Great topic!!! I have never heard anything about this and cant wait to see it developed. All the best with your content building and I will check back and see if there is anything I can help with. Happy writing. --David James Stevenson (discusscontribs) 10:51, 8 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I have found a useful source which addressed the association between height and suicide risk among a large sample of Swedish men. The study found a strong inverse relationship between height and suicide risk. Hope you find the source useful! Source: Magnusson, P., Gunnell, D., Tynelius, P., Smith, G., & Rasmussen, F. (2005). Strong inverse association between height and suicide in a large cohort of Swedish men: Evidence of early life origins of suicidal behaviour? The American Journal of Psychiatry, 162(7), 1373-1375. Or access from: http://ajp.psychiatryonline.org/doi/10.1176/appi.ajp.162.7.1373 --U3082322 (discusscontribs) 07:51, 22 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Thank you!! I'll definitely use that --U3096927 (discusscontribs) 07:03, 23 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hey! good topic so far. I cant wait to read the finished product. I would shorten the headings to each section but As of now i cant find anything else to change. Uu3148421 (discusscontribs) 07:58, 24 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

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Hello! I have found some information which I feel may help you with your book chapter. Some height disorders include: Gigantism, a rare condition which causes abnormal growth in children generally caused by a pituitary glad tumor The pituitary gland makes hormones that control many of the function in the body such as sexual development, growth metabolism and urine production. If a tutor grows on the gland it creates excess growth hormones. . Turner syndrome, a rare chromosomal condition which affects development in females and causes short statue. i would also look at discussing how growth disorders how managed with the use of hormones. Also i would suggest you look into the biological theory to help explain growth disorders.

Ref: Marshall, W. A. (1977). Human growth and its disorders. Academic Press Inc.: London. Ranke, M. B., Guilbaud, O., Lindberg, A., & Cole, T. (1993). Prediction of the growth response in children with various growth disorders treated with growth hormone: analyses of data from the Kabi Pharmacia International Growth Study. Acta Paediatrica, 82(s392), 82-88.


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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  1. Theory about the multiple factors causing height are well explained, with theoretial explanations for the relationship between height and mental health states also, importantly, well considered.
  2. In terms of "what can be done about it", the focus was rather physical rather than psychological. Psychological options could be expanded.
  3. The case studies were helpful.
  1. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned)
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some of the sentences could be made more effective by simplifying them.
    4. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  2. Layout was very good.
  3. Use bullet-points in See also and External links.
  4. Learning features
    1. Quiz, several images; no tables.
    2. The chapter makes excellent use of some interwiki useful links.
  5. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets
  6. APA style
    1. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:24, 19 November 2015 (UTC)Reply


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  1. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.
  2. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation.
  1. Almost two-thirds of the presentation is about height. Abbreviate this considerably and dedicate more focus to the topic - height and mental health.
  2. Include citations about evidence for claims.
  3. What can be done about it focusing on the more difficult challenge of changing physiological height rather than on the psychological and social reasons that height may be related to mental health.
  4. The conclusion audio is matched with the display of references - suggest using a different slide which summarises the take-home messages.
  1. Clear, large font text.
  2. Clear and well paced audio.
  1. Add description.
  2. The copyright license and source for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (e.g., in the description or in the presentation slides). Prezi re-use is indicated.
  4. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:24, 25 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

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