Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Eye Movement Desensitisation and Reprocessing Therapy and emotion

Comments

Hey! Great book chapter so far, and a very interesting topic. I am doing my book chapter on 'Emotional Freedom Techniques (EFT)' and emotion, and I know that I have come across a lot of research (Karatzias et al, 2011 is one worth looking into) that compares Eye Movement Desensitisation and Reprocessing Therapy with EFT, particular in treating PTSD. Many studies have found both techniques to be effective! Hope this is helpful. Well done and good luck U3048330 (discuss • contribs)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:58, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall . Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory coverage is weak. EMDR is never really clearly explained, although the 8-stages of practice are described - what actually happens? Why/how is it theorised to work? This is covered, but could be significantly expanded, and more general info could be abbreviated. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful. Research Several key studies are cited and described, but this could be done in more detail. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Figure captions should be more explanatory. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Learning features The chapter makes no use of interwiki links. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour). Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:58, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content The overview sets up the presentation. Well structured. Theory was well covered - EMDR is explained, but perhaps more detail could be provided (e.g, the stages). Explain BLS more clearly. Good use of questions as slide titles. So, what does research indicate about EMDR and emotion? A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. What are the practical, take-home messages? Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Varied intonation adds interest and engagement. Visuals are simple and text-based, but easy to read. Consider incorporating non-text based visual information to supplement the narration. Production quality Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:41, 3 December 2015 (UTC)