Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Emotional labour dimensions, antecedents, and consequences

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Hi,

This seems like it's shaping up to be an interesting page. I can tell you've got some formatting left to do but I thought I would help out. I've amended your figure captions so they reflect APA formatting. I've also added the required code in your references section so your references will have an indent. Finally, I thought it might be a good idea to add some interwiki links to your page. I've added one for emotional labour in your first paragraph so you can see how it's done. Adding them to relevant concepts and theories really aids comprehension. Good luck! U3036568 (discuss • contribs) 00:44, 8 November 2015 (UTC)

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Hey its starting to look good!! . Just pointing out where it says (however there must be some other reasoning why - ie) it could say (However, there must be some other reason why – IE) - just reads a little easier. I have also gone through a few of the paragraphs for you and just fixed some grammar mistakes and performed minor edits. Drop a comma when you put in a but or however or the sentence will be too long. All the best !U3075297 (U3075297 contribs.

Also someone dropped this in on my page which was useful

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== Chapter review and feedback This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is covered to a sufficient degree, but not really discussed in detail. Addition of more examples or case studies could be helpful. Research Research is mentioned, but is lacking in sufficient detail. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources. Many statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Currently, this is a significant issue in this chapter. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is problematic. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Several useful/relevant images are included. Learning features Add more Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Ideally, tailor the quiz to the topic. (The topic isn't burnout). Spelling Fix: James Lang -> James-Lange; Cannon-Baard -> Cannon-Bard Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). Check and correct capitalisation (e.g., for names of theories). Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of many sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of commas (e.g., "For example" -> "For example, ") APA style Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., for et al.) Figures should be referred in the text. Direct quotes need page numbers. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. For the first citation of a source with three or more authors, include a comma before the "and" or "&" When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) first and and then Smith et al. (2001) subsequently). The reference list is not in full APA style. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:32, 2 December 2015 (UTC) Multimedia feedback The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. Overall Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation. Structure and content The Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Well structured. Theory was well covered; research less so. Include citations about evidence for claims. Consider adding a Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points. Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. There is no need to mention who you are etc. (this is largely irrelevant to the viewer). Varied intonation adds interest and engagement. Present in the third person (i.e., avoid "I", "my", "we" etc.) because the presentation should be about the Visuals are clear and easy to read, although the font size on some slides could be increased to aid readability. Consider including images. Production quality Overall, well produced. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). No active hyperlink link is provided back to the book chapter. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:30, 2 December 2015 (UTC)