Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Breast cancer and anxiety in women

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Hi! I read what you have so far and its good! I think that in your treatment section, you should include how long a typical patient has to attend to treatment and if breast cancer has ever been cured fully. Otherwise, goodjob :) uu3148421 (discuss • contribs)

Hey there, i found a really great article that may help you with your book chapter. It has heaps of information that could help you answer your question and there are heaps of references in the article that could help you find further information. Baqutayan, S. M. S. (2012). The effect of anxiety on breast cancer patients. Indian Journal of Psychological Medicine, 34(2), 119-123. doi:10.4103/0253-7176.101774 Just look that up through the university of Canberra library search function (3083783ro (discuss • contribs) 11:12, 25 September 2015 (UTC)=3083783)

Hey! just had a quick look over your chapter, and was wondering if you will be including anything on health anxiety? I just did a brief article search and there appears to be an abundance of research relating breast cancer to health based anxiety, with some suggesting breast cancer may trigger health anxiety. 121.127.213.102 (discuss) 06:37, 29 September 2015 (UTC) U3100310

Hi there, this is a great book chapter and I think you are right in saying it's a sensitive topic for almost all of us. I think what you have so far is great, the content is good and I like how you've talked about breast cancer and anxiety independent of each other and then combined the two. Will you also be talking about women being anxious about getting breast cancer? If you decide to discuss this area I think it would be great to add a link on how to do a self examination as this could potentially reduce anxiety for someone; I think this will add another practical aspect to your book chapter. I know you've included information on what changes to look but I think some pictures would go great with this part. Here is the link for a self examination http://www.breastcancer.org/symptoms/testing/types/self_exam/bse_steps --U3046579 (discuss • contribs) 10:35, 3 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! This chapter is looking fantastic - well done! I have only got a small suggestion to improve the overall quality of your chapter: where you can, add hyperlinks to other Wikiversity pages. For example, when you talk about 'Glandular Tissue' you could provide a hyperlink that enables and encourages the reader to explore further if they want more information on that particular topic. U3048330 (discuss • contribs) 11:15, 3 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello. Great work so far! I saw your section discussing the role of intentions in breast cancer screening was still in progress, so I thought these articles might be of help: Rutter, D. R. (2000). Attendance and reattendance for breast cancer screening: a prospective 3-year test of the theory of planned behaviour. British Journal of Health Psychology, 5(1), 1-13. DOI: 10.1348/135910700168720 (link) and Drossaert, C., Boer, H., & Seydel, E. (2003). Prospective study on the determinants of repeat attendance and attendance patterns in breast cancer screening using the theory of planned behaviour. Psychology & Health, 18(5), 551-565. DOI: 10.1080/0887044031000141207 (link). They both discuss the ability of the Theory of Planned Behaviour in predicting intention and actual behaviour for initiation and maintaining screening (TPB expanded on TRA by adding perceived behavioural control, i.e. resources and self-efficacy; which might be particularly important for this behaviour). Hope it helps! U3083676 (discuss • contribs) 22:00, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! your chapter is really informative, flows really well, and is an interesting read. Incase you are after something to add further to the treatment section of anxiety: my chapter is on mindfulness and anxiety, and throughout the research process i found information about the reduction in stress levels of women with breast cancer and shifts in their immune profiles from mindfulness-based stress reduction therapy. It can be found here https://www.lindacarlson.ca/system/files/immunepaperfinal.pdf. Best wishes with the rest of your chapter! --U3065920 (discuss • contribs) 23:50, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello. The chapter looks fantastic, really well structured and thought out. It is just a thought but maybe some more emphasis in your ' treatment' section, that early recognition leads to best rate of success. It to me feels very confronting and I can imagine someone who has cancer and/or anxiety may need a little boost. All the best. great work! keep it up --David James Stevenson (discuss • contribs) 10:09, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there, I think you have done a fantastic job. One little thing you could include in the emotional impact section is the loss of self identity and self perception/image that comes with difficult physiological changes such as mastectomy, loss of hair etc. It really fundamentally changes the way victims see themselves and can cause extremely low self-esteem and loss of identity. Just a thought! Tigeralee (discuss • contribs) 10:48, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, Not sure if you're wanting to add anymore content but I have found a really interesting article that may be of benfit to you. "Effects of two types of social support and education on adaptation to early stage breast cancer. It is in the journal: research in nursing and health , volume 25 issue 6. RT 81.5.A1.S1. Good luck--U3096823 (discuss • contribs) 03:37, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Breanna,

I have this feedback in the discussion forum but I thought I'd add it here too for your convenience. Just read your Chapter. A great effort. I was just wondering as I read if there was any evidence that pointed to women with higher levels of anxiety being prone to longer diagnoses or even increased negative prognoses than women who perhaps did not have high anxiety. A question, I guess relating to the effects of that particular emotion on a women's chance of winning the fight against the disease.

Keep up the good work.

Candice--CJBush03 (discuss • contribs) 00:23, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

External Links

Hey! Your chapter is amazing! It really communicates quite a sensitive issue really well. It's obvious to the reader you've put a lot of thought, time and effort into compiling this resource, and it's definitely paid off for you! The only minor thing you might like to consider is putting in one or two external links. But I'm not sure how close you are to the word count, or if there are specific marks given for this but it's just something to think about! Overall, a really awesome job though U3096454! (discuss • contribs) 06:11, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Fantastic

Really enjoyed reading your chapter, I was wondering if there were any self-help resources/groups that might support women to deal with their anxiety? These could be a useful reference? U943390 (discuss • contribs) 06:20, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! This was really interesting, and definitely a beneficial resource to add to the book chapter! The layout and colours are definitely visually appealing and softens the harshness that may be perceived about the content. Might I suggest a change in structure though. It seems a little jumpy. For instance, maybe consider adding the links to charities at the bottom of the page with other links. --U3096856 (discuss • contribs) 06:38, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi there, thank you for reviewing my chapter on flow and mastery (chapter 41). Your comments were helpful. I hope your chapter is progressing well. In reviewing your chapter, I'd like to offer the following:

The opening few sentences were captivating in that they introduced shocking information that immediately established the scale and gravity of the problem.

You used hyperlinks and references well, and the structure, including short paras, made absorbing the concepts relatively easy. You placed figures in close proximity to relevant text which was also great.

The 'concept, definition and application' table was very helpful, however, on my reading I was unable to locate a title.

The last para before the heading 'treatment' made an important point that may be worthy of highlighting in some way, perhaps a text box of some kind. Likewise for the last sentence before the heading 'the emotional effects of breast cancer, particularly as the message is of a kind that may give hope to your readers (much like you have done with the statement 'I am the tightening...'). In regard to the sentence under this heading referring to struggling family members, you may wish to include a brief note about the specific issues they face when 'struggling' and what they can do to improve how they cope.

You may wish to consider hyperlinks for terms such as: GAD; OCD; PTSD and other similar terms in the para to assist readers find further information about these if they wish.

Under the heading 'treatment', you may wish to consider adding information regarding the growth of on-line treatment channels, which may be of particular relevance to socially isolated or socially phobic readers, those in remote locations who may still have internet access.

I found figure 7 very informative.

There is an interesting book chapter on running and depression that may also be of interest to you.

Under the heading 'who is at risk' the 3rd sentence may benefit from a reference. The last sentence in this para may benefit from highlighting in some way. Likewise for the last sentence in the next para.

Your chapter does justice to a very serious topic. You've deftly incorporated some very hopeful, even triumphant, messages, backed up by excellent references, and these messages may justify greater emphasis in terms of how they are presented.

Your chapter is very well written, a very worthwhile read indeed. Thank you again and I wish you all the best with your chapter.

Kind regards

Daniel u118741

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by abbreviating the general background information about breast cancer and about anxiety as separate constructs, and expanding the discussion of the relationship between breast cancer and anxiety. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory The Overview mentions breast cancer, but not anxiety. Revise to reflect the topic. Add a Conclusion. Case studies and/or examples could be helpful. Research Discussion about research about the relationship between anxiety and breast cancer should be expanded. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Learning features The chapter makes some use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - also incorporate links to related book chapters. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:03, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content Well structured. Theory was well covered. Perhaps there could be more focus on research about anxiety in this target group, with the key points from psychological theory and research more clearly emphasised in the conclusion (e.g. there is no mention of the theoretical models in the conclusion?). Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals are clear and easy to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Overall, well produced. Clear, detailed title. Description is minimal but sufficient. Also consider including a brief description of presentation, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:56, 26 November 2015 (UTC)