Hi, i was reading over your page... I know this is due today, but i would just like to forward my page and it may help in explaining your example of when athletes are in a situation of being motivated and unmotivated.
Self- efficacy and motivation
Hey, great work on such a big chapter! motivation in sport and winning can be an overwhelming subject with so many different aspects to look at! i think you have achieved a very concise and informative chapter that is easy to read, and doesn't cause the reader to get bogged down in the external resources. this chapter also ties in to a few others in the 2014 book chapters which have really strengthened the points and statements you have made. looks like you really did your homework on such an interesting and topical subject. Well Done and Good luck with your final edits!
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a basic chapter, with good coverage of theory, little coverage of, or integration of, research, and basic usage of the wiki environment. For suggestions, see my copyediting plus comments below.
There is notable lack of explanation of relevant research.
When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags e.g., "For elite athletes finding the motivation to compete comes down to being the best and to be the best they have to win".
The chapter is often written in the 2nd person perspective (i.e, "you"); preferably write in the 3rd person objective when reviewing and explaining theory and research. Case studies or exercises etc. could use 2nd person.
The chapter would benefit from a more developed Conclusion.
Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the [explain?] tags
Learning features
Minimal usage of potential interactive/learning features of the wiki environment.
Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
Spelling, grammar and proofreading
Use Australian spelling e.g., maximize -> maximise
Check grammar e.g., for there vs their
The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
APA style
APA style was not used for citations e.g., (Roberts, G. C., & Duda, J. L. (1984); Kerr, J. H. (2014)) -> (Kerr, 2014; Roberts & Duda, 1984)
Did you consult Maslow (1943) and read it? (doubtful) If not, don't cite it.
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The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.
The multimedia presentation does not provide a sufficiently in-depth or watchable overview of the problem (what motivates athletes to win) and what is known from a motivation or emotion theory and research point of view. The structure is ok, but the content lacks depth. There is some really great information in the chapter that could have been included in the presentation, and this could have been achieved within the 5 minute time allocation. The presentation vaguely addresses relevant research but barley any theory is presented or incorporated in the presentation. The slides are not well timed and so it is difficult to take in all the information in the time allocated and the viewer does not get a good understanding of the content. A case study or example as well as an overview and conclusion slide could have been helpful.
Communication of ideas using voice and image is not clear. The audio recording of voice cuts in and out throughout the presentation so that the first two slides are presented without any audio, as is the slide on female motivation to win. When there is audio playing the voice is reasonably well-paced but a little fast at times. More expression could also be used to make the presentation more engaging. Pictures are used nicely to re-enforce the information being provided verbally. The two first slides contain too much information - try to keep it brief and highlight the important points. The inconsistent timing of slides (too slow and too fast) makes it hard for the viewer to engage with the presentation and have time to view the content on the slides.
The basic production tool (Prezi) is not put to use effectively. Please check the run through of the presentation – it does not run smoothly with voice missing throughout and slides changing too quickly. The voice-over is reasonably clear when it cuts in, although there is static and background noise. The visuals are generally clear. Although hyperlinks for the sources of the photos are provided, these images do not appear to be licensed for re-use, so the presentation violates copyright law. Some text is too small, making it difficult to read. The presentation would also benefit from being rehearsed some more. No reference list is provided. No links to and from the book chapter and presentation are provided. A public and reusable copyright licence is provided.
