Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Social comparison and motivation

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Does anyone genuinely believe that their lives are lesser in meaning than another individual's because that person has "more"? Why do you believe this, and does it have an effect your personal life goals?

Hi, your page is looking great! good use of the picture! Just to let you know, I'm currently editing Social Media and Motivation (What motivaties social media use) and have linked your page onto mine, as I've found that a motivation for people to use social media is to socially compare themselves with others. A possible topic you could consider in your contents is 'modes of socially comparing' and if this suits then feel free to link back to mine too :) Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 20 October 2014 (UTC)--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Just changed your images to be of APA formatting as well :) --Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 01:08, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Ideas

This is such an interesting topic! I am excited to see where it goes in the next week. I like your structure so far; especially the questions at the start to create an understanding for the reader and how and why this topic is relevant to them. I was wondering if you could add in your section about 'what motivates people into wanting more' - you could discuss advertising? As it is a relevant aspect to many people… anyone who owns a radio, car, tv for example. The first article introduces the idea of advertising and social comparison, middle article discusses women specifically and social comparison, the final one mentions the theory you have discussed initially at the start of your article and incorporates advertising's role in social comparison. I am sure your already on a role with everything but this is just an idea if your in need of another point of view for the readers. Good luck  :):)

Some ideas -

http://www.acrwebsite.org/search/view-conference-proceedings.aspx?Id=5973

http://nedic.ca/sites/default/files/files/Does-size-matter-impact-models-body-size-womens-body-focused-anxiety-advertising-effectiveness.pdf

http://www.owlnet.rice.edu/~ajv2/courses/12c_psyc438001/Karau%20&%20Williams%20(1993).pdf

--Jessiek86 (discuss • contribs) 08:51, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:30, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Late ideas

At this late stage, I'll only provide suggestions for small alterations you could make.

Overview section 1st paragraph: change favors to favours (Australian spelling) 2nd paragraph: opening line contains a direct quote but no page number is given. Also, use double quotation marks ("text") instead of single ones ('text').

Festinger's Social Comparison Theory section 1st paragraph: another direct quote with no page number. Remember to use direct quotes sparingly.

Overall suggestions: Make images bigger to add colour to your page and break it up more. Also, use captions on you images. N8. (discuss • contribs) 02:01, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall A nicely constructed presentation - well done. Structure and content The structure is clear, with an overview being provided at the beginning of the presentation. The flow is logical. Research is nicely integrated throughout. The presentation is based around one theory of social comparison. This theory is well explored, but are there others that could have been at least briefly mentioned? Illustrative examples may have been useful. Communication Communication is generally well done. The voice-over is too fast throughout. However, the expression is good. The slides are nicely developed. Images are used appropriately throughout. The text could be slightly larger. Production quality Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio and visual quality are both good. A link back to the chapter is not provided.

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Overall Overall, this chapter provides solid coverage of relevant theory and research. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Festinger's hypotheses are provided in too much detail (summarise and provide a link to the detailed list); instead focus which of these hypotheses are most relevant to understanding motivations for social comparison Research Did you consult Festinger (1954)? If not, don't cite it. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression is generally good. Direct quotes are overused. Layout Check/add captions for all Figures. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Grammar and proofreading Check/correct use of affective vs. effective Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') The grammar of some sentences can be improved (e.g., see the tags) APA style Check APA style for direct quotes (e.g., direct quotes need page numbers). Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. The reference list is not in full APA style. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:44, 2 December 2014 (UTC)