Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Serotonin and emotion

Low serotonin levels don't cause depression

This article may be of interest: http://psychcentral.com/blog/archives/2014/09/13/low-serotonin-levels-dont-cause-depression/ Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:00, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

tips and feedback

Hey! I have some tips and feedback for you;

- Firstly I have edited your chapter by placing indents at the beginning of each new paragraph as that is APA formatting. Just copy and paste the syntax i placed at the beginning of a new paragraph and paste in when you start new paragraphs!

- APA formatting also requires you to caption picture starting with 'figure' followed by the number of figure (italicized) and then a caption. for example i copied this from my chapter;

Figure 4."Eating a three-ounce cucumber is like drinking three ounces of water, but better," (Goldman, 2011, p.1)]]

- Also I added a table of contents because I noticed yours was missing!

- lastly, I will just suggest that it might be interesting and more engaging if you incorporate a quiz or other interactive material for readers to engage in.

I know you haven't finished yet, but i hope this helps!!!

Good luck!

Brookelouise23 (discuss • contribs) 06:24, 31 October 2014 (UTC)brookelouise23Brookelouise23 (discuss • contribs) 06:24, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

a few edits

Hi there,

This chapter looks great, I really enjoyed reading it. I have made a few minor edits such as: adding links to wiki pages on some terminology, and some sentences. I really liked the two tables you had it made things easy to read and sort of like a conclusion of the important factors.

Lucy90 (discuss • contribs)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation – well done! Structure and content A well designed and organised presentation which provides an excellent overview of the role serotonin plays in emotion. Logical flow between concepts is clearly demonstrated as is linkage to, and integration of, research and theory – very impressive. The presentation is comprehensive and covers quite a lot of territory without trying to do too much. The inclusion of myths or fact/fiction in regards to serotonin and food was an interesting addition. Perhaps an overview slide or initial explanation of the presentation's structure would be helpful to the viewer. In-text referencing to match the end of text reference list would also improve the presentation. A great summary slide was provided at the end of the presentation. Communication Clear communication of ideas using voice and image was displayed. The presentation was engaging and displayed good use of illustrative examples. Slowing the pace at which the content was delivered (read aloud) and using more images could improve the presentation. Production quality The presentation had clear picture and audio quality and demonstrated effective use of PowToon to communicate ideas. The presentation also had a clear element of professionalism about it. No copyright license is provided for the presentation. A link is provided from the book chapter to the presentation, however, the link provided from the presentation to book chapter needs checking (it doesn’t directly link to the actual book chapter). A comprehensive reference list is provided.

RenaeLN (discuss • contribs) 02:08, 21 November 2014 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Theory is well covered. Research Research is well covered. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Written expression Written expression is very good. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page). Layout Images are used, but captions are needed. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:29, 8 December 2014 (UTC)