Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Power posing and self-confidence

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:00, 22 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

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Hey,

Looking at your topic, I wonder whether a discussion on the defence force and the role of the senior officers, and how power posing affects their self-confidence and that of their subordinates? Also what about models and how their poses make them feel more confident, or whether they are posing to just portray confidence (and cover up their low self-esteem). This would be really interesting to read about.

You could even just use one of these as a case study discussion.

After a quick search I have found some interesting discussion in this area that you might find helpful in developing your chapter:

- Daily Mail UK article

- NY Times article

- article from Businessinsider.com.au

Good luck, hope these ideas help.

Smelle24 (discusscontribs) 09:29, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


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A well delivered presentation. Congratulations!

The structure is good, with a clear and logical flow throughout. The presentation is strongly grounded in theory and research. The practical conclusions, based on research, are a great inclusion. Potentially more content could have been covered by exploring some research in less detail. An overview slide at the beginning would be useful.

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  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter which is undermined by the quality of written expression. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.
  1. Theory is reasonably well covered.
  1. Several useful studies are cited and explained.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  1. Written expression was problematic.
    1. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview. The Conclusion is excellent.
    2. Avoid directional referencing e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned
    3. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
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  3. Learning features
    1. Quiz questions are well used
    2. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links.
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    1. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., ones vs. one's
    2. Check consistency of capitalisation e.g., Power Posing vs. power posing, Embodied Cognition vs. embodied cognition
    3. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    4. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags
  5. APA style
    1. Check use of et al. e.g., (Carney, et al., 2010) -> (Carney et al., 2010)
    2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
    4. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    5. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references; check inclusion of page numbers.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 26 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

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