Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Internet relationships and motivation

Comment

Hi Chamou A short social contribution to your chapter.

It's probably worth checking out what are (allegedly) the top Australian dating sites, provided you are looking at an Australian angle for your chapter, of course. I would also do some 'action research' to check out the wants/desires/dreams in the profiles of people registered on the different sites. A casual look makes them seem all fairly formulaic, but you might find some patterns emerging if you look at a few. It's probably a thing that changes with age/demographic as well, so the motivations for one group eg. 21 year olds, may be different to those in their 60's. But maybe it's just that we're all looking for leerve! Good luck with it.

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Comment 2

Hey! I just came across your page, and thought that we might be able to benefit from each other! I'm currently editing the chapter "Social media motivation - What motivates social media usage?" one of my headings is for social connection, which seems relevant to this chapter. Depending on what direction you want for your page, i've found that factors that influence social media use could be things like personality, and in your chapter context of needing a relationship - someone with high Neuroticism traits have shown high belongingness needs and may pursue to meet these needs through these internet relationship sites. Good work so far! The graph looks great on the page and provides an easy visual for the reader.--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 22:59, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

feedback

hey, I like your headings so far. Some ideas to get you thinking a bit further - perhaps include some discussion on being single and meeting people, and perhaps a bit of history of how people interacted socially/romantically in the past compared to the different ways people meet in modern day society. Also looking at social isolation with the new age of the internet would be interesting, and maybe the types of people that are using the internet for dating (which would be very broad from my first hand knowledge) and what this says about society today. Goodluck!

User:Smelle24 20:54, 16 October 2014 (UTC)

thoughts

Hi, I think that this is a really interesting topic to be exploring. The world relies on the internet and technology for so much now and it think that it is important to explore how and why dating has found its way to the internet and what motivates people to go to the internet to find life partners friends and hook ups. I think it would also be worth looking at the different mobile applications that are out that center more around 'hooking up' with people like tinder and grindr. cant wait to read the finished chapter good luck :) K.kauhanen (discuss • contribs)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:16, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall This is a basic, which needs more in-depth coverage of theory and research. Structure and content The structure is logical, but the content lacks depth. There is some really great information in the chapter that could have been included in the presentation, and this could have been achieved within the 5 minute time allocation. Maslow's hierarchy of needs is explored briefly, and no other theory is presented. Research is also not sufficiently incorporated. Communication The voice-over is quite well-paced. More expression could be used to make the presentation more engaging. Pictures and figures are used nicely to re-enforce the information being provided verbally. The main slide contains too much information - try to keep it brief and highlight the important points. Production quality Basic production tools are used adequately. The voice-over is clear, although perhaps too quiet. The visuals are generally clear. Some text is too small, making it difficult to read. No link back to the book chapter is provided. No copyright licence information is provided.

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Overall Overall, this is basic chapter. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below. Theory Theory coverage is minimal. Maslow's hierarchy is described and map onto online dating, but this is largely conjecture. A broader consideration of relevant theory is recommended. Research Relatively little research is cited. Ideally, identify the dozen or so top psychological research studies about this topic. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression was not of professional standard (e.g., the quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page).) Layout Apply correct heading levels (Level 2, then Level 3) Several Tables and/or Figures were used. The captions could provide more explanatory detail. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Quiz questions were basic; the questions could be revised to focus less on descriptive statistics and more on theory/research/take-home messages. Grammar and proofreading The word "that" is missing from many sentences - see my copyedits The grammar for many sentences needs improving (e.g., see the tags) Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets APA style Check the APA style for figure and table captions. Did you consult Maslow (1943, 1954)? If not, don't cite them. Check/correct formatting of in-text citations. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Direct quotes need page numbers. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:24, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

Comments about revisions

Subsequent revisions have been made, with comments as follows:

1. Some interwiki links have been added as external links; these should be changed to internal links
2. Reeve (2009) is used as a reference; instead use primary, peer-reviewed sources
3. Heading levels have not been corrected
4. Overview has been expanded (good)
5. The chapter still uses Maslow's hierarchy of needs as the motivational framework, but the selection of this theoretical model and the relationship between this model and internet dating motivations is not well justified and does not appear to have been developed through cited theory and research.
6. Material about two other theories has been slightly expanded.
7. More detailed captions have been added to images but APA style is not used.
8. New, grammatically incorrect material has been added (e.g., "This increases communication in an online relationship, this is supported by Carr and Walther’s (2014) non-verbal cues." and "Individual's online are encourages to interact with non-verbal cues, such as self-disclosure and checklists to have a more positive outcome with online dating.")
9. Referencing has been improved, however some tags were removed without any other changes (such as providing a citation) (e.g., "As this is an anonymous environment, there is little to no judgement involved when turning down an individual, as there would if being done it person" and "Many online members have reported to have met partners, made friendships, and create support networks for hobbies such as sports.")

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:42, 17 December 2014 (UTC)

These minor-moderate changes were reviewed:

1. Wikipedia links were changed to internal links
2. Brief summary of Tay & Diener (2011) added - research
3. Unreferenced mention of Seligman to well-being and life satisfaction - doesn't appear to be directly related to the topic (internet relationships and motivation)
4. A one sentence paragraph about William Glasser (1998) has been added - it isn't clear how this relates to internet relationships and motivation
5. New paragraph added with research/theory about disclosure of personal information.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:46, 26 February 2015 (UTC)