Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Insider threat motivation

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but effective presentation. Structure and content The presentation is well organised. There is little mention of psychological theory. There is little mention of psychological research. Case studies/examples were helpful - perhaps using a case study towards the beginning could help to engage the viewer. Communication Communication is generally effective. The text on some slides is too small to read easily. Voiceover is well-paced. individuals that -> individuals who Production quality Production quality was basic, but good. Audio is clear. The presentation goes for considerably longer than the 5 minute maximum. No link is provided to the book chapter. A link to the presentation was not submitted on Moodle.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:56, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:33, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good, interesting chapter. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Psychological theory isn't particularly well covered and some of it seems speculative (e.g., self-efficacy) or at least without supportive citation (e.g., see tags) Research One key research study is described. Although some research on this topic may not be publicly accessible, the most relevant peer-reviewed research work should be described and cited. Written expression Written expression Write in third person rather than first person; remove "I"s. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page). More emphasis should be placed on practical outcomes that fit with the theme of the book. Layout Coloured boxes were removed to aid readability; keep the style simple (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles) See earlier comments about heading casing Tables and/or Figures were used effectively. Learning features The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links. File:Critical_Pathway_Model.jpg has a lot of surrounding white space Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences needs improvement (e.g., see the tags) Check and correct the grammatical use of "that" versus "who" Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') APA style Check/correct APA style for in-text citations Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) Check and correct the APA style for captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:33, 9 December 2014 (UTC)