Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Emotional control vs. emotional expressiveness

Feedback for editing and referencing

Hi there here is some feedback as requested on moodle I enjoyed reading your chapter and you cover the requirements well. It is very well explained and easy to read. The formatting looks really good also! I like that you have external links interspersed in the writing so a reader is engaged to learn. You have some really intriguing photos too!

Here are some comments in regards to some editing you may want to consider.

Consider rephrasing your overview – all very good points which I think with a different expression may portray the message more clearly. Consider using the following if you wish – “Which is best, keeping our emotions in, or letting them out? This is a question asked by many, yet there is still uncertainty of how one should regulate or express their emotions. Is the saying ‘don’t bottle up your emotions’ relevant in today’s society? Is the ‘big boy’s don’t cry’ a useful way to respond to our feelings? This chapter will explore whether emotional expressiveness, or emotional control, is a better approach for dealing with our emotional experiences. Which approach leads an individual to live a more emotionally effective life?. This chapter will discuss the different strategies used for emotional VS expressiveness, their consequences, and the associated positive and negative outcomes.

In your section ‘why do people use it (regulation)’ consider rephrasing the sentence Research has told us that a child's ability to regulate their emotions can play an important role in their ability to get along with peers and teachers plus long-term behavioural adjustments (McCoy, 2011). To ‘research has found… this sounds more academic.

Also your heading ‘expression of emotions’ could be changed to ‘emotion expression’ to match the heading style for emotion regulation. I also suggest changing the words ‘pros and cons’ to something like the usefulness or damaging effects expressing emotions can have. I also see some areas in text where a comma would be appropriate, I am happy to suggest these to you or add them myself if you would like some assistance.

You also may have filled your word count, but if you haven’t and are looking for more research I think the topic of emotional expression and therapeutic effects (like going to therapy) would be a nice inclusion to have. Overall I think you have done a really good job, and I have learnt a lot! Your conclusion wraps up the chapter nicely and sends the ‘nugget’ message well.

Comments for referencing I noticed a few errors in your referencing, although I was not ‘bold’ to make the changes myself here is a list of my suggestions you may want to review. In ‘what are emotions’ heading, once you have refrenced Desento… any subsequent references on this article only need to say “Desento et al., (2013) as you do not need to reference more than one author after the first time. Also from my understanding for articles with more than 3 authors, in your first and subsequent in text references you only need to write the first author and et al., for example – in common forms of emotional regulation part Giese-Davis et al., (2008) would be appropriate as opposed to your existing reference for four authors. Also in text referencing should not use & rather the word ‘and’. In your section ‘health effects of expressive suppression’ you also have another 4 author in text reference which could be updated. You also have a quote in the cognitive reappraisal section in a box, which does not include the page number (as required by APA) and should be italicised

Goodluck with the rest, if you would also like to provide feedback on my page i would appreciate it ː) https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2013/Daily_hassles_and_uplifts Rashpocket (discuss • contribs) 10:18, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

u3054791's Feedback

Hi Kieran, This seems like a great structure to have your book chapter based around. It is easy to comprehend and follow. You've also seemed to cover an adequate amount of theories relating to emotional regulation, but don't forget we need to discuss and critique these theories and their integration into the research of emotional control and expressiveness. Also perhaps in the section around health effects of expressive suppression you could add a figure or picture towards the right, this could help break up the text in this area? By adding the consequences as well down the bottom, it is still a 'self-help' book chapter which is good :) U3054791 (discuss • contribs) 23:45, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:10, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

u3054871's feedback

Hey, great chapter so far - you have a plenty of information :) Perhaps the common forms of emotion regulation section could be tidied up a little. Also, maybe a case study or example would be a good addition to your chapter. Hope that helps :)

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Hey Kieran

It looks very good (has a lot more than mine at the moment haha). Like a couple of people have already suggested, maybe you could try moving a couple of the images to the left just to change up the layout a bit. Other than that it looks great. I like the use of the table to list the negative effects of expressive suppression and the use of a visual diagram to explain the theory. Clarev (discuss • contribs) 11:27, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi Kieran - the content is really good I think you just need to find a way to break the text up a bit. Maybe put the section into boxes --Florence21 (discuss • contribs) 12:49, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hello Kieran. I thin your chapter is looking good visually. The only part I had trouble wiht was the "health effects of expressive suppression" section. There seemed to be alot of text here. Maybe you could break it into dot points or some form of table? Otherwise I think you have done a good job! --Bridgiedidge (discuss • contribs) 22:47, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

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Hi, your chapter looks pretty good. It's well structured and the layout is good. I thought that you could have a bit more information about what cognitive reappraisal is. It could also use a few examples in a few sections. Blue Tardis (discuss • contribs) 07:53, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

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Overall This is an informative chapter on a really interesting topic - well done! Theory Theory was well selected, and explored at a level appropriate for the target audience. Practical application was quite well addressed. To improve further, include some evidence of critical thinking. Research Research is well integrated into some sections of the chapter. The section of health effects is a particular stand-out. However, other areas lack detailed exploration of the relevant research. This is an area for improvement. Written expression The chapter follows a logical and clear structure. The interactive features and links throughout are a great addition. Remember to in-text reference all ideas that are not your own.ShaunaB (discuss • contribs)

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Overall Structure and content Theory and research are well integrated throughout, with key concepts being effectively chosen. The flow is particularly good. Content appears accurate and is of academic quality. Communication Verbal communication is clear and confident. The design of slides used in this presentation was very engaging towards the beginning of the presentation, but seemed to plateau towards the end. Illustrative examples throughout would improve the presentation. Production quality Picture quality is good. Sound quality is also good, but was a little quiet. Basic production tools have been used well to create a professional presentation. ShaunaB (discuss • contribs)