Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/LSD and emotion

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Excellent summary and link

Section headings

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  1. Effective, simple, 2-level structure, easy to follow and focused on addressing the topic
  2. Use question marks at the end of questions
  3. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points

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  1. Key points provided for most but not all sections at time of submission
  2. Write for an international, not just Australian, audience
  3. Ensure to address theory not just research - what are the main theory/theories (e.g., neuroscience/neuroanatomy/neurotransmitter, but maybe also emotion theory etc.) that help to explain the emotional effects of LSD?

Image

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  1. Included, with appropriate size and caption

References

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  1. Very good
  2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
  3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. Good
  2. Wikipedia links go in See also
  3. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:13, 15 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Feedback

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Hey there!! Thanks for your feedback on my page, the articles you suggested were actually super helpful, I really hope I have enough time to talk about them, they fit in perfectly with my topic.

I have had a quick read of your chapter and it looks like it is a super interesting and fun topic to discuss! I loved reading about the historical uses of LSD, I didn't realise it was ever legal! What a shame in that it became illegal after being used for such great psychotherapy reasons. I like the use of your review quiz questions; they would be great after every major heading in your chapter to keep the reader on their toes!

I found an article that may be interesting for you (hopefully this helps!) its reference is below:

d'Angelo, L., Savulich, G., & Sahakian, B. (2017). Lifestyle use of drugs by healthy people for enhancing cognition, creativity, motivation and pleasure. British Journal of Pharmacology, 174(19), 3257-3267. doi:10.1111/bph.13813

I had a quick read, and it really builds upon the good side of drugs that isn't really broadcast to the public.

Anyway, I hope this helps! Im interested to see how your topic develops, and will stay in touch if you have any further thoughts!

Demibree (discusscontribs) 02:48, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Author response 1

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Hi Demi,

The legality of LSD is really strange. From the research I've done it has been really difficult to find anything peer reviewed on when and why it became illegal. Even just finding a date has been really hard! From non-peer reviewed webpages it seems to be that LSD was discovered, it began to make really huge changes in psychiatry making people who have not had any success with the current treatments at the time for depression and alcoholism have a 180 degree change in there views and either become less depressed or significantly less likely to drink excessively. All from LSD changing the way their brain connected things and how they saw the world!

LSD was particularly big in the US during the 'hippy' era. Everyone was doing it, including researchers as LSD really boosts creativity and out of the box thinking. From my research it seems like the government just freaked out over this new wave of thinking and drug taking and they simply didn't like it. So they criminalised it. There is so little information out there on why it was criminalised it makes me think that its been covered up, or at the very least people didn't write about it as they didn't want to be associated with something that had become demonised.

Criminalising it halted research in this incredibly promising direction. I think has held back the way we have looked at treatment for years! Thankfully, the beginning of the resurgence into alternative forms of treatment like LSD now upon us. I think marijuana use for cancer sufferers started it off again and I hope its building momentum continues and we can help people in ways that hasn't been seen in the last 50-60 years!

U3117276 (discusscontribs) 03:11, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

User response

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Hi again,

Oh wow, it seems like one big conspiracy theory! That makes me super curious as to why the cover up occurred, or why there isn't much information out there about it! It really is a shame. I mean sure - drugs like LSD can and will always be able to fall into the hands of people who abuse its use - but this is the case for many drugs, legal and not illegal - like alcohol and cigarettes!! I find it really disappointing that you haven't been able to find much that is peer reviewed about the topic. Maybe you could however make a little sub-heading about non-peer reviewed research? I'm not sure how well this would fit in with the marking criteria, but if you are really desperate to include some of that really interesting information you should go for it!

Also, after having another brief look over your page - I think you could definitely add in some hyperlinks to wikipedia pages within some of the sections that you have completed; as there are some terms that not everybody would understand and wikipedia links provide better detail.

Hope to hear from you again soon!

Demibree (discusscontribs) 03:36, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Author response

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Yeah the lack of information is really annoying! I did find one article (that I have put into my book chapter) about how it was said if you want to throw your research career away- study psychedelics. Social stigma ruins so much! It's the same with micro-dosing (which you can read about on my page). There hasn't been anything peer reviews at all on how micro dosing can improve your creativity and functioning! All the research so far has just been individual people self reporting their findings. And the findings look so promising! I'm really looking forward to a proper study being done. U3117276 (discusscontribs) 04:29, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

User response

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Haha, what a thing for an article to say!! Yeah I can imagine, I have found a similar social opinion regarding my chapter - sex! And maybe there will be. Have you found that the study of LSD and other illegal drugs has increased over recent years? Because, I am assuming if you have been able to find some in recent years (and then back in the 50s and 60s) - surely it means there is a rise coming along!

Demibree (discusscontribs) 22:54, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

I would also suggest moving the user comment you have under your conclusion title in your chapter! I am sure it was meant to be placed in your discussion section!

Demibree (discusscontribs) 23:00, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Author response

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In the last few years there have been more and more articles being published on LSD and other illegal drugs. The studies are even becoming more publicly accessible, on my chapter page I have put a link to a TedTalk done by Carhhart-Harris, who seems to be leading the way with work in this area, so many of the articles I found were written by him, it has made referencing a bit harder though! U3117276 (discusscontribs) 01:10, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Social contribution thank you note response

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Hi,

I just wanted to thank you for the lovely note you left on my discuss page in regards to my chapter ghrelin, leptin, hunger and eating. It made my day to read your feedback and I am so happy that my chapter helped you link in to a youtube ted talk. I had a look at your chapter and I can also see that you have done a lot of work and put a lot of effort into creating your chapter. It is an interesting read and a very interesting topic. Good luck with marking, I hope you get a great result for all your hard work.

--EmmaCane28 (discusscontribs) 05:22, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Moved comment from conclusion page

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Wojak McFeelson (discuss • contribs) 18:41, 23 October 2017 (UTC)Wojak McFeelsonWojak McFeelson (discuss • contribs) 18:41, 23 October 2017 (UTC) - I would suggest that you expand your points some more. The law part is good it just needs to be fleshed out a little more.

Conclusion comment response

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Thanks for the advice, I wanted to write more about the laws surrounding LSD but I don't think the work count will let me. Especially since it doesn't really meet the marking criteria as it doesn't have much to do with the relationship between LSD and our emotions. U3117276 (discusscontribs) 00:16, 25 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address the topic.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.
  1. Theories are well described and explained, with useful detail in examples such as quotes and information about dosage effects etc.
  1. Relevant research is well described.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Some interwiki links were used. Also add such links for other key words such as hallucinogen. Also embed links to related book chapters, such as about awe.
    2. Very good use of images. Captions could be expanded.
    3. Very good use of tables.
    4. Excellent use of embedded quizzes.
    5. Excellent use of user quotes.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    2. Check and correct overuse of semi-colons. Where they are used, commas would often work better.
    3. Check and correct use of commas.
    4. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct APA style for referring to figures - e.g., should be integrated into a sentence and capitalise "Figure X".
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    3. Citations
      1. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Add spaces between author initials.
      2. See new doi format.
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes.
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Excellent narration voice and pace.
  4. Interesting combination of animated visuals and accompanying text.
  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  3. Check and correct match between license in description and license in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:44, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

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